tag:blogger.com,1999:blog-8503889855562099029.post5359285297357319590..comments2010-02-02T14:53:09.391-05:00Liviahttp://www.blogger.com/profile/15805379309049803903noreply@blogger.comBlogger7125tag:blogger.com,1999:blog-8503889855562099029.post-20057146028541366712010-02-02T14:53:09.391-05:002010-02-02T14:53:09.391-05:00eclecticquill -- Lol. Shea and Kven were in the same cell, so they could see each other, but they couldn&#39;t see into cells farther away. That&#39;s my interpretation, at least.Liviahttp://www.blogger.com/profile/15805379309049803903noreply@blogger.comtag:blogger.com,1999:blog-8503889855562099029.post-21423302372822856382010-02-02T14:40:54.752-05:002010-02-02T14:40:54.752-05:00I completely feel the impact of the scene. But the analytical part of my brain is stuck on - if neither could see in the darkness, how did the narrator see &quot;the realization in Kven&#39;s eyes&quot; or &quot;the tears coursing down his cheeks&quot;?eclecticquillhttp://eclecticquill.livejournal.com/noreply@blogger.comtag:blogger.com,1999:blog-8503889855562099029.post-81944126746557599362009-12-04T17:17:21.146-05:002009-12-04T17:17:21.146-05:00I love this analogy. What I try to do is pace scenes according to how important they are to the person experiencing them - so events where they pay attention to every second are described at great length. But I never thought that what I was actually doing was presenting them like a movie, in slow-mo! thanks!dirtywhitecandyhttp://www.blogger.com/profile/10088813423467048081noreply@blogger.comtag:blogger.com,1999:blog-8503889855562099029.post-37911313097880313242009-10-24T11:38:42.232-04:002009-10-24T11:38:42.232-04:00&quot;downshifting increases RPM&quot; I like that.Liviahttp://www.blogger.com/profile/15805379309049803903noreply@blogger.comtag:blogger.com,1999:blog-8503889855562099029.post-18109490265786886302009-10-24T09:36:01.102-04:002009-10-24T09:36:01.102-04:00This writer seems to know the value of pacing intuitively; it&#39;s hard to believe anyone could be taught to write like this, to know that downshifting increases RPM.<br /><br />MalcolmSun Singerhttp://www.blogger.com/profile/07840134761199335243noreply@blogger.comtag:blogger.com,1999:blog-8503889855562099029.post-79471541795491966952009-10-20T15:09:23.531-04:002009-10-20T15:09:23.531-04:00I remember this story--it was very intimidating! I was writing regularly when I was 14, but I&#39;m sure it was nowhere near this caliber.<br /><br />The thing that really stands out for me, though, is the way the writer transitions to internal observations then back again without missing a beat.Petahttp://www.blogger.com/profile/14388142098775012377noreply@blogger.comtag:blogger.com,1999:blog-8503889855562099029.post-32017892216408831422009-10-18T22:07:03.390-04:002009-10-18T22:07:03.390-04:00Very nicely. Boot Camp for Writers also mentions showing important scenes in slow motion, but the example there isn&#39;t as good as this one.suelderhttp://suelder.livejournal.com/noreply@blogger.com